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How can I improve my prologue?
I'm trying to strengthen the beginnings to my story, and I'm hoping I've done a pretty good job in my prologue. What do you think?
2 Answers
- StephLv 59 years agoFavourite answer
I'm just wondering why you made it into a prologue at all. It works better as Chapter One. Not every story needs a prologue, you know.
Overall it's not bad. I'd probably shorten some of the sentences during the fight scene to make it a little quicker. Break it up a little. But it's not bad.
- 9 years ago
I would change the line "To fulfill her needs."
Doesn't sound natural to me, not to mention gives the impression of a steamy romance or something.
But, keep up the good work, it seems your story flows well. :-)
